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This is the 3rd installment of Cami’s First Kiss. For the first 3 excerpts, click Cami’s Page OR Free Reads above.
“Not a chance, Sunshine.” Arg. Mocking Guy and his Mocking Words.
“Stop calling me that.” Dear God, the man took control of everything starting with my humiliation and continuing with my name. “I am not your sunshine.”
This is the thing I hated most about being Lisbeth’s friend. It wasn’t the horde that surrounded her.
It was that one-in-a-billion man who got my attention and, even if he was arrogant and overbearing, held it when I knew all he’d want was to walk that beautiful Levi’s-covered butt around the bar and see if she’d give him the time of day.
He glanced across the bar, his perusal slow. I could see him take in Lisbeth and knew what he saw. His eyes scanned the crowd around her, the men bantering for her attention, the women shooting her envious looks, the bartender keeping her well-liquefied.
Once, just once, I’d like to have been the object of that type of study. The kind that takes in everything, weighs the odds and then disregarded them to pursue regardless.
“I don’t want to deal with dolts vying for attention when I’m wooing a woman.” The right side of his mouth quirked up in a lopsided smirk. “It isn’t the competition. I just don’t like to share.”
“So, what exactly do I need to do to get my notebook back.” I eyed his bottom wondering if I could just reaching in his pocket and retrieve it. He really did have a nice butt. Maybe that’s what distracted me from grabbing my notebook and gave him time to swing around, that lopsided smirked aimed at me again.
“Here’s what I’m thinking.” He leaned in as if to tell me the best kept secret outside Julia Robert’s anti-wrinkle treatment. “I’ll grab my friend. You grab your friend. We’ll get out of here before she starts a riot and he starts a bar fight over someone else’s girlfriend.”
I turned to look at the guy he’d jerked his head toward. If I thought Mocking Guy was hot, his friend was Adonis. Attitude and all.
“And?” It was a good excuse as excuses went to end this public torture. I had to leave the bar to get back the notebook I needed in order to write my story. Even Lisbeth couldn’t argue with that.
The left side of his mouth quirked up to join the right in a full-ray smile.
“And then we go have some fun.” Mocking Guy stood up, patted me on the bottom and said, “Go get your girl. We’ll meet you out front.”
My rear tingled. Seriously, like shimmery little tingles. I couldn’t remember the last time someone had dared to touch any part of me that wasn’t a polite handshake. Not that it matter since he was just warming up his moves for Lisbeth.
Mr. Guy (we should be on first name basis after that bottom-pat, but I like to keep clear boundaries) cut his way through the crowd, beelining for Adonis.
I watched him go. Couldn’t help myself. I also watched the girls he passed watch him go. One reached for him as he squeezed between her and a table, her hand resting on his arm as if to test its withheld power. Mr. Guy bent toward her, his hair flopping forward over his glasses. She, tiny little annoying-perfect thing that she was, went up on tiptoes to whisper in his ear. Mr. Guy threw back his head and laughed.
Must be nice to make him laugh with you, not directly at you.
Mr. Guy shook his head and kept moving, inching closer toward Adonis through the crowd. The faery girl turned and scanned the crowd, her gazing landing on me, hardening before she shrugged in a disgusted kind of way.
Yeah. I knew that look. It said “As if.” And I knew the answer too: Never. Of course, she sighted me, not Lisbeth. If she knew his real target, she’d back down, claws retracted, without another glance. Instead, I got the death-ray vision look.
Didn’t she know sidekicks were benign.
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I’m aching for her. I really, really want her to get a good guy. And I’m hoping Lisbeth isn’t a bitch. She needs a good friend. Signs aren’t good, though. *sigh*
Elise
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Looking forward to next month’s installment! Still loving this and can’t wait to see where it’s headed after we get past where I’ve read. The serialization of it’s working too. Yay you!
I love how you’ve characterized her. I’d like to see what’s going to happen now that she has to leave the bar with Mr. Guy and what she’ll have to do to get her notebook back!
Poor Jenna. I’m so enjoying this story. Looking forward to the next installment.
YAY! Thanks ladies – I love Jenna. A certain diva *cof*mama*cof* made me write her and then a certain diva *cof*mama*cof* CLAIMED Jenna was me! Can you believe that??? As if I’m really that goofy and socially awkward and klutzy and unaware of my surroundings….oh, fine…well, that diva *cof*mama*cof* finally said she was maybe me time 3…I said times 8….anyway….glad you’re all enjoying her.
More ridiculousness next month!
Now the party is really starting! Jenna is definitely someone you want to cheer for.
Great excerpt, Bria!
Haha…poor gal. I hope Mr. Guy doesn’t put her through too much in order for her to get her notebook back! Either way, though, I’m already rooting for her.
LOL. I love how the guys have such generic character names!! THis story just keeps getting better. I always look forward to reading what Jenna is going to do next!
Like this narrator’s voice!
I love your ridiculousness! This story is so awesome. Really I’m going to need more.
Seriously, write more and send it to me. I promise not to tell.
Is this book coming out any time soon? Seriously. I would so read it.
Aw, thanks Celise. You can’t know how much I needed to hear that this week!
Nope, this one is strictly for the blog. I’m working on my YAs that have a similar voice and my Fantasy series that beta readers I’ve never met love and agents hate
Maybe you can turn it into an e-book. Are you planning on posting it in it’s entirety? Snippets are all well and good (they really are) but I want to read the whole thing at once. Just curiousl
LOL — wow, that’s the best thing I’ve heard.
Right now I’m just doing the installments. I’m trying to decide if I should do it weekly instead – Haven’t thought about ebook.
Thanks
Ooooh, do it weekly! DO IT WEEKLY! I’m sure everyone else would agree. Post something else monthly. This story needs to be weekly.
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